Writing for HS, AM (Scalice, '07)
Emily Jing
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Exercises
Posted by ejing at 2007/07/05 09:56:33 PDT
Edited at 2007/07/05 12:00:45 PDT

The popsicle tastes very good.
The declicious ice-cold popsicle melts in my mouth on a hot summer day.

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Tangible Nouns:
Lilies
Basketball
Diamonds
Tree
Monkey
Waterbottle
Pencil
Lamp
Dumpster
Fireworks

Intangible Nouns:
Happiness
Dreams
Truth
Sad
Smell
Taste
Feeling
Anger
Love
Wisdom

Metaphors:
The lilies of love.
A dumpster of anger.
The diamond of dreams.
The basketball of truth.
A monkey of sandess.

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Yellow:

Yellow is the color of happiness. The color of the sun shining on a warm summer day. Along with the yellow sunflowers swaying in the wind. Yellow reminds me of my best friend. She is yellow just like me. Because when one says yellow, I automatically think of asians. The color of our skin is yellow.

Chocolate:

Chocolate is my craving. The sweet taste fills my taste buds and runs down my throat as my stomach is finally satisfies. Chocolate is my bestfriend forever and always.

Editing:
When you say "finally satisfies" it should be finally satisfied. Because statisfied is a weird word like that and thats the way it should be gramatically correct. "Chocolate is my bestfriend forever and always." Chocolate "will be" my best friend forever and always. ~Brian

Response:
Thanks! I was just in a rush and so I couldn't think of what to write.

Flowers:
Valentines Day is the most popular day to give your loved ones flowers. Roses, Lilies, and Tulips flood supermarkets days before and yet empty out very quicky. Sweet scents fill the air as the variety of flowers open from budding.

Concluding Essay:
Love is a simple word yet so hard to explain. One can not describe what kind of a feeling they get. Butterflies in ones stomach, excitement rushing through ones veins, and the pounding of ones heart are the closest one can come to in describing what is so great about love.

Words/Phrases I like:
- rushing
- swaying
- fills the air

-During traffic hours the rushing of cars pollutes the air.
-The dim lamp sways back and forth in the haunted mansion.
-Happines fills the air on Christmas morning.

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Descriptive Essay
Posted by ejing at 2007/06/28 10:28:23 PDT
Edited at 2007/06/28 20:54:21 PDT

Hot humid air fills the lungs of dozens of people as they step out from subway stations. Where there are no crowds or people, there are motorcycles, cars, tour buses, and taxis packing the streets. The loud honking of cars, and screeching of tires may all seem chaotic to a foreigner, however to someone who has lived in these busy streets their whole life this is home. Scents of all sorts float through the air attracting those with an empty stomach, and also those who have just eaten.

People walking through the loud streets pass by stores, who are each blasting their own music. As shoppers walk past each store a rush of cold air is blown towards them, drying up the sweat that is constantly trickling down their cheeks. With a clear blue sky and no hint of a breeze, shopping gradually becomes more difficult. Many adults end up plodding along to reach a comfortable spot where they can rest. However, the young teenagers continue working their way until they reach the end of the street.

In the midst of the crowded streets, there are street vendors selling their delicious foods. The aroma of each cart attracts many people. These carts have a variety of specialties that are loved by all. On every corner, there is a store very similar to 7-11, if not one. In these stores, there are infinite amounts of drinks you can buy. Also, piled on the shelves are instant noodles, chips, candy and anything one can imagine.

Schoolmates walk around in their plain, blue and white uniforms while gazing at all the foreigners, laughing as they get tricked into paying higher prices. And once the day has turned to dusk, the dangerous yet thrilling streets of Taipei are the places to be. The subways are once again flooded with crowds of people. But instead of going home, their adventure continues to another part of town. And the luminous lights, loud laughter, and the scent of mouth-watering foods continue to fill the air.

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